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11-10-2008, 12:20 AM
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You’re beautiful today,
You’re beautiful tomorrow, We’ll die of old age, No wept tears of sorrow, Or so I hoped… You’re beautiful today, You’re beautiful yesterday, I’ll die of sorrow, Of your non-existent tomorrows. - Last edited by Peppy; 11-10-2008 at 05:05 AM. 
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11-10-2008, 04:25 AM
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Poignant and sad. And wonderfully expressed. You captured something heartbreaking in a small package. Nice!
 (Last line: "your"?)
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16-10-2008, 03:59 AM
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Short, heartbreaking, and definitely tells a very sad story, it's amazing to me that you could make such a point in such a serious manner in something so small. Nice piece, Peppy.
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16-10-2008, 02:10 PM
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Impressive, sad, beautiful now and forever....witha good archive lol
Nice stuff pepy.
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16-10-2008, 10:59 PM
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Ha! This is great stuff, Joker. You really focused on this one and tightened it up. The parallel structure makes it a smooth read. I'd like to see more like this.
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