[Bissme]

If a mirror
Breaks now
All of us
Could hear

But if a heart
Breaks now
None of us
Could hear

I can't help asking myself
Why the suffering of
A broken heart
Is always silent.

[Ryankia]

I like this piece. It is simple and conveys a good concept.

There are a couple things which I feel is lacking here which would really help this piece stand out.

1) Commas. Though not always necessary, I felt the way you presented this piece could be helped with commas.

I.E. - "If a mirror
Breaks now,
All of us
Could hear"

2) " I can't help asking myself" - I think "I can't help but ask myself" sounds a bit better in this case.

Just those couple of things and it looks great!

[Bissme]

Bissme Here. thank you very much for u comment. a writer is always looking forward to comments. only through comments he can improve. thank you again

[Ryankia]

You are most welcome. We cannot know how to improve, if were are never given instruction ^.^

[dearest]

Subtle, simple, and lovely. I'm afraid Ryankia has already pointed out most of my comments (I agree, commas would help), so I'll just say how much I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing!

[Bissme]

bissme here. thank you fire insurance for saying that you like my poems. it makes my day. a writer is happy when a reader appeciate his work

[TaylorRenee07]

Ahw. I really love this poem!

It poses such a beautiful question, and it's so beautifully sad.

I really loved reading it.

At first I didn't like the repetition, but now that I look back, I do.

Really great job!

Very simple, yet beautiful at the same time!

I agree that it would look better with punctuation, though.

Really good job!

[I'm Taylor, by the way. I'm new here, though I write for a few other writing sites and have written & reviewed fpr a couple of years ]