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Old 04-03-2008, 08:56 PM
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Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

I’ve climbed the next flight of stairs,
without moving my legs,
and now I look down,
at the spiral of limbs,
of heart-broken hymns,
the prayer,
so unfair,
to those of whom I love,
left, lying, so I could move on,
and I tell myself to wait,
they can’t be far behind,
but of course,
innately me,
I broach the step
and flee,
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Old 05-03-2008, 03:00 AM
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Re: Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

Really loved this...seems a different ramble and more confident and unique/surreal ideas and expression. Nicecorn!
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Old 05-03-2008, 03:30 AM
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Re: Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

I agree with Lu, different tone here, incredible. That opening image just smacks you, looking back on tangled feet still stuck on stairs. and then the end, the fleeing, it is surprising, and then not... very human like to see what is, try and do what is right and then run. Anyhow, I loved this one and remind me in case I forget to get it in March's PotM
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Re: Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

I agree with Bri and Lu. Amazing work! The rhymes were nicely done and the flow was flawless.
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Old 30-03-2008, 03:01 AM
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Re: Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

Thankyee friends...and you all. I love you guys..and tyou help me to no end. Thankyou. I like it too...sorta...hmmm
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Re: Light my life, Light my house, light the fire

Great poem. i loved it. Keep up the good work
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