[Rain]

Confused about how you feel about me,
I have no idea what to do.
Thinking of what we could be,
I'm unsure about you.

Skin so beautiful and smooth,
mine so ugly and flawed.
Body so curved and soothed,
mine so rugged and clawed.

I'm reaching farther than I ever have before,
and I'm at my limits, I've run out.
But I'll keep pushing for you more and more,
so you'll never have to be in doubt.

I just want you to understand,
I just want you to know who I am.

You almost fell into this hole in my life,
it seems endless, it goes on forever.
Almost trapped in my pain and strife,
please make it go, I surrender.

Every moment we spend together,
I grasp it tight and won't let go.
Every moment we spend I treasure,
open it up to remind me when I'm low.

I'll try my best until I succeed,
be the best friend I can be.
I'll be right beside you for any need,
be your guardian angel, you'll see.

Anything, anywhere.
Everything, everywhere.

[Nupur]

This is so sweet! All the emotions are very well expressed. I'm surprised this hasn't got more comments... old stuff... Nice to see how much you have matured. Your present style is way different... where this is all nice and rosy, most of your newer poems talk of more realistic topics... and they are presented using different structures. Still good to see something from the early days. And feels even better to know that you were always very good.

[Rain]

I hate this one Thanks Nupur!

[Vorcla]

You shouldn't. It's good. It would make a nice song, actually. Kind of breezy and mellow; a change for you.

[Rain]

That's cause I was somewhat happy. Thanks Rick.

[Lubesh]

Stay happy..this was a treat.

[Rain]

Easier said...thanks.

[Rotten1]

I adore the contrast you use between the two parts you wish to make whole. It’s as if you placed the other half on a pedestal yet you are content to simply sit and admire if this is thier wish. Yet you are not so despondent to give up on your love. This is the exact sort of passion much like (as you will see in my writing) the type of true love so many seems to think has died over the course of time. This is as beautiful as the feeling that inspired you to pen it out. Your words eradicate hopelessness in my cold heart.

[Corneac]

Ahhh Taylor, this is quite beautiful. I'm so proud to see this - I kwo I haven't been an dedicated commenter, I've always tried to read your work, time permitting. This is awesome. It's old aye?

Your flow was great, you mastered it, and it hand-in-hand with the beauty of your sentiment was just brillaint.

You hate it? Duuuuude it's awesome.

Anything, anywhere.
Everything, everywhere

Perfect last line. Great job mate - keep writing.

[Sammi]

I understand the feeling of wanting love so badly when all you ever had in your life is loss and disapointment.I have felt the urge to want what I felt I never had but watched others enjoy in their lifetime..... Love. That was a very awesome and touching feeling you have behind this poem great job!!!

[Rain]

Originally Posted by Rotten1

I adore the contrast you use between the two parts you wish to make whole. It’s as if you placed the other half on a pedestal yet you are content to simply sit and admire if this is thier wish. Yet you are not so despondent to give up on your love. This is the exact sort of passion much like (as you will see in my writing) the type of true love so many seems to think has died over the course of time. This is as beautiful as the feeling that inspired you to pen it out. Your words eradicate hopelessness in my cold heart.

Thank You

Originally Posted by Corneac

Ahhh Taylor, this is quite beautiful. I'm so proud to see this - I kwo I haven't been an dedicated commenter, I've always tried to read your work, time permitting. This is awesome. It's old aye?

Your flow was great, you mastered it, and it hand-in-hand with the beauty of your sentiment was just brillaint.

You hate it? Duuuuude it's awesome.

Yeah... I kinda do lol. Thanks for taking a look, buddy.

Originally Posted by Sammi

I understand the feeling of wanting love so badly when all you ever had in your life is loss and disapointment.I have felt the urge to want what I felt I never had but watched others enjoy in their lifetime..... Love. That was a very awesome and touching feeling you have behind this poem great job!!!

Thanks.