[HUNNYBUNNY]

You see what my eyes see
At this very time
The sun is setting
Another day is ending
Another day closer
To when we meet again
In my mind you are here
Because you see what I see
As you long for me
I close my eyes and there you are
Standing next to me
On this quiet lonely street
The wind hardly blows
And down the sun goes
To finish a day
We are closer yet

[Lubesh]

I liked that a lot.very subtle and poetic! well done

[Miragedev]

I don't know why but this feels melodious to me. It's a great piece.
I can picture the sunset in my mind, as the two lovers sat gazing and thinking about each other. I don't just like it, but i love it!

[HUNNYBUNNY]

Thank you shuhui and Lubesh. i do like this poem better then most of my others. ~*~

[Dark Kitten]

I'm gonna go with Shuhui on this one! It IS very melodic, the flow of this poem is beautiful and dreamy and, indeed, poetic. (Don't ever take for granted that just because its a poem it's poetic, THAT takes a special kind of poem, and you, dear HUNNYBUNNY have written it.)
Excellent job!
You get my coveted Triple YAY! lol
~DK

[Wordsmyth]

I must totally disagree. This poem was horrendous. I cannot see what everyone is talking about.

Hold on.... I'm just kidding !!!! There was just way to much love going on here.

I also really enjoyed this poem. I'm usually not a fan of the poem that doesn't really have a rhyming scheme, but you have written a very nice piece here.

[Dark Kitten]

You, mmw, are a horrible person! LOL.
~DK

[Wordsmyth]

Originally Posted by Dark Kitten

You, mmw, are a horrible person! LOL.
~DK

I'm sorry. I'm a baaaddd Boy.

[Dark Kitten]

YES, you are, that was not a nice trick! :p

[Storiesmaniac]

ha ha i thought it was great mww, lol, ha me laughing. Well great work hunnybunny, really smooth, and reminds me of my best friend because she is counting down the days until her darling boyfriend gets back. Yay. lol any ways great work keep it up.

[amethystgreen25]

I like this one, it's very pretty..and it also reminds me of me..of course you know why haha, anyways great job with this one

[Phonoho]

This piece reminds me of a girl I used to know. A girl who bears a very striking resemblance to Lubesh's avatar. Our union was not to be, as her husband was my best friend, she was my boss, and I a mere wandering artist/chef who refused to be a bit player in her Catholic school melodrama. We agreed to marry at age 80, an age when we've little but passion left.
Your poem gives me hope that she still waits for that day. Thank you.

man, thats one hell of a situation.

[Shortstorylover]

its very romantic, and when i close my eyes i can actually see you on this lonely, quiet street

[HUNNYBUNNY]

aw wow...... im glad everyone likes it and i hope things work out for you phonoho

[squattaz]

I am guessing the setting sun is just one step/ one day closer to reunion?