[ms_mae572]

Is he blind?
Is he deaf?
Can’t he see what she has done to me?
He says he loves her
He wants to hold her
He doesn’t understand why I hate her
She double-crossed me and talked to him
She told him I loved him,
She got under my skin
Can’t he see why I feel this way?
Why does he love her, but not me?
He says he just wants to be friends

But I’ve heard enough
I can’t take this feeling any longer
Can’t he see by the look in my eyes
I want to be with him
I want to be with him

Now, they are together
Like two birds of a feather
And maybe, once in a while
Does he give me his same old smile
Friends to the end
That’s what we’ll be
Never anything more
Because we’re just friends

But I’ve heard enough
I can’t take this feeling any longer
Can’t he see by the way I look in his eyes
I want to be with him
I want to be with him

She dumped him
He’s so depressed
Can’t he see that I’m right there
Next to him, his crying shoulder
I want to be with him

And when I go to sleep at night
It takes all my might to not to cry
After all we’re just friends

But I’ve heard enough
I can’t take this feeling any longer
Can’t he see by the look in my eyes
I want to be with him
I want to be with him

And now
He can see
That all this time
It’s been him and me
Together at last
No longer just friends

[dearest]

I love that this is so relatable. A lot of people have been in that position at one point or another, just friends, but maybe wanting more. You communicated that confusion and longing brilliantly, and I very much enjoyed this. Nice work!

[ms_mae572]

oh thanks! i wrote it a while ago and recently found it on my computer, so after a few revisions, i decided to post it here. glad you like it

[Vorcla]

Ah, yes - the opposite of those five words all guys dread hearing: "CAN'T WE JUST BE FRIENDS?" Nice job, Mae.

[ms_mae572]

oh thanks, but hey, it's actually based on actual events in my life lol

[Peppy]

The beginning was a little less lyrical to me. It was a little stiff on and seemed to be stuck on story-mode. But as I progressed further, I noticed you began to loosen your visual tongue until it started to sound like a real song.

I think that's all I have to ssy. Good read, Mae.

It takes all my might to not to cry

Do you really need a "to" there?