Oh! What A Lovely Night,
Everything Dark But Noone Can Hide.
A Beautiful Damsel In Evening Gown,
Waiting And Sighing In The Town.
A Fortune-teller Making Money,
Saying Words Coated With Honey.
An Infant Crying For Moon,
Mother Telling Him He'll Get It Soon.
Barking Dogs And Squeaking Mouse,
A Thief Entering Landloard's House.
The Mistress Weeping-No Food No Money,
Master Consoling Soon They'll Have Coins Many.
No This Isn't A Lovely Night,
Everything Dark Still Noone Can Hide.

Oh! What A Lovely Night,
Everything Dark But Noone Can Hide.
A Newly-wed Couple Having Moonlight Dinner,
A Lad Pratising Hard To Be The Winner,
Mother Feeding Her Child,
Father Is Busy Looking Mild.
Scouts Camping In The Forest Singing Song,
The Church Bell Going Ding-Dong Ding-Dong.
Smoking His Cigar There Sits Grandpa,
Children Listening Fairytales Told By Grandma.
Sitting In The Garden Drinking Wine,
Everybody's Happy Everybody's Fine.
Of Course This Is A Lovely Night,
Everything Dark And Noone Can Hide.

[LullabyHearts]

This is lovely but one question why is everything capitalized?

[BlackOrchid918]

I love how you touch upon so many different personalities and manage to make them believable and familiar despite the brevity of their descriptions. I also love the irony...a night can indeed be lovely and still, while people's lives are anything but. Very well-done!

[Serac]

Classy. It had a simple rhyming scheme and stuck to it, even if one or two of the words didn't exactly rhyme. It was a good switch up how you made the first night a 'bad' night, but the second a good. I went through it a second time to try and find what was the main difference between the two nights. It seemed to me that the good night focused on family, whereas the bad night focused on.....not family. Mistress is mentioned, after all. Though, a mother and her child are also mentioned in the bad night, which basically makes my theory pointless and likely incorrect. If ever you feel the need to elaborate, by all means do so.

[Phonoho]

This piece has never been edited and was not posted by an existing member. Should this thread be deleted?

[Ryankia]

Nah, just leave it. It isn't hurting anything right now.

[in_absentia]

Well, I do like it a lot but, like LH, I have a problem with all of the Capitol letters. They're distracting, hard to read, and they mean anything in the realm of the poem.

[spinx]

I just loved it