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Old 30-05-2006, 09:48 PM
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To Be Like Me

This slapped me in the face while I was trying to write one about a hot summer day spent under a maple tree, not sure if I like it but I like the message so I figured I'd share.



What's it like
To be like me
What's it like
To be so free
My concern, my care
For social affair
Was stolen, was taken
Was given for free

What's it like
To be like me
It's freedom, it's flying
It's smiling with glee
Join me, lets dance
Join the romance
Or stand in the corner
For fear of their glance
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Old 31-05-2006, 12:01 AM
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Re: To Be Like Me

Good stuff superbum ...the second verse for me didn't have the same buzz to it with the words used towards the end of it and rhythm but i loved it
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Old 03-06-2006, 03:19 PM
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Wow you're pumping out the poetry, so to speak!

Like Lubesh said, I enjoy the first stanza more than the second
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