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08-04-2007, 12:19 PM
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I Wanna Say
You said:
"Your heart's like an apple And every different boy You love, takes a bite away. And after a while all you'll Have is a core, and your Real love will end up Throwin' you away." I wanna say: "Damn, that boy Ate your heart away." You said: "Maybe God plans for You to do more than Get married, and Have some babies." I wanna say: "Maybe I don't care what God's Got planned for me anyway." You said: "You gotta stop caring What people think about You, and do what you really Wanna do." I wanna say: "Goodness, a hypocryte Stands before me today."
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron Last edited by JirQUEST; 08-04-2007 at 01:19 PM. 
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08-04-2007, 06:17 PM
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Re: I Wanna Say
Its actually very nice. keep it up
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09-04-2007, 12:46 AM
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Re: I Wanna Say
Anything bad, or could be improved?
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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09-04-2007, 04:44 PM
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nope nothing bad that i can pick up on. excellent piece book keep it up
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10-04-2007, 05:17 AM
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Thanks arsenalelite!
hopefully this can be my "come back from writer's block" peice. hehe
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"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, Falling, like dew, upon a thought, produces That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think." - Lord Byron
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