[BookWhale***]

Fly me up to
The heavens.
Let me smile again.
Let me feel you presence,
To hear your voice
Whisper in my ear.
Raise me up to touch the
Shooting stars.
Hold me,
So I do not fall.
Hold my hand so I know
You are there.
Touch my heart,
And let it love.
Come down from above.
I want to see your smile.
I want to know you
Are proud.
Shout my name to
Make me yours.
Let me fly with you
Moon and sun.
I am yours.
Just lead me, Lord.
My heart is open,
Waiting for you to come,
And take me home,
Where I belong.

[Lubesh]

Really lovely poem bookwhale, expressed well.

[BookWhale***]

Thx... *blushes* lol.....

[M. Gegishov]

I think this make for a brilliant prayer. There are a few errors in grammar, but nothing major. For example, in line five, "you" should be "your" (a simple typo, no doubt); in line twenty, "your's" doesn't require an apostrophe; and for the two subsequent lines, the comma belongs after the "you," with no comma being required between "moon, and sun." It's all very minor, but it gives the piece that extra glow. Great write!

[BookWhale***]

Originally Posted by M. Gegishov

I think this make for a brilliant prayer. There are a few errors in grammar, but nothing major. For example, in line five, "you" should be "your" (a simple typo, no doubt); in line twenty, "your's" doesn't require an apostrophe; and for the two subsequent lines, the comma belongs after the "you," with no comma being required between "moon, and sun." It's all very minor, but it gives the piece that extra glow. Great write!

Thank you, M. G. . I appperciate the typo fixes, and the complement.

BW***

[juan butini]

Another great poem/prayer!

Thank you,

jb

[BookWhale***]

thx JB.

quick question: who made this thread a sticky????

[Lubesh]

the sticky fairy....probs lol or jir

[BookWhale***]

lol, ok lubesh. so one is hyper from a caffine or sugar rush! lol

[Lubesh]

....more sinnister bw

[RENA HANDS]

Delightful. Charming. I am certain that this would make an apt night or morning prayer.

[Tahn]

For anyone who has seen "Gladiator", you'll know what I mean with this comment. This poem would work EXTREMELY well at the end when Maximus is going back to his wife and boy in Elysium or heaven. Thats the first thing that came to my mind when I read this poem. Good job, this is a very uplifting poem for those with lost loved ones.

[Jayna]

I love the way that your poem flows gracefully from one line to the next. Its up lifting and sweet. It make me want to fly( if i had wings). lol. Great job

[PaulJJ]

I really like this poem. I dont know what, but it made me feel something lol.