[SeaN]

I revolve around
these broken candles...
bleeding wax on a
pale table cloth

I move in between
the drips and drops
these spots of humanity
burn marks and holes

I swap this wisdom
for dime bags and papers
for humility and peace
and purity and hope

I lose myself
in words and phrases...
those caviler glances
a hazel-eyed gaze

I'll cut you off
before you get close
for I don't know myself
and I don't know you

I'd love to hold
my heart in my hands
and squeeze until
it stops.

[Jess1016]

This is a really Awsomly discriptive poem. I love the metaphone, although, like much of poetry, i dont understand it all. But the wax that symbolizes firey knowlege and how its almost a barganing chip for a drug or a high is a really cool concept. Interesting stuff sean.

[Storiesmaniac]

Wow sean im talking to you...and...im reading you poem...i feel special...lol...Hahah na mate this is a great poem the metaphores are amazing, but then again you always have this great way about your words, they are captiviating and amazing. This poem is no exception, great work.

[Venus]

Wow. I don't think I've read much of your work, but if they compare this poem, I am really missing out. Your use of metephor creates a vivid image that truly brings your words to life and creates a wonderful mood. Nice work man.

[Venomous Vixen]

Oh WOW Sean, this is just incredible... geez! The candle turned metephor at the beginning really hooked me, and then "I swap wisdom for dime bags and papers" just simply brilliant... and then the end... perfect. I noticed something here that I have not seen before, you held nothing back. This one was like a tiny glimpse into your soul and I loved that... great work!

[Corneac]

Great metaphors, so perfectly rounded. <Mine are always shoddy and miscalculated...yours a perfect...carried through. Nice Sean, great rhythm, great imagery...and like Bri...an inner glimpse there. Great piece.

[SeaN]

wow I'm shocked! Thanks allot for all the great comments everybody!

Jess: don't feel too bad- I don't even understand all of it lol

Tim: Quite a set on compliments man- I thank you. haha yeah must have been weird reading and skyping at the same time.

Venus: Thank you kindly! I'm glad you like it! (btw I have been reading your story faithfully! Just haven't had too much time to comment recently. Really getting interesting!)

Bri: Thanks for pressing for the stream of consciousness folder!! I think you are right; I almost saw this as a journal entry so it allowed me to open up a bit more I think; instead of over-preparing my words.

Corneac: shoddy and miscalculated!?! You're crazy man! I'm not joking at all when I say I've learned a great deal from your style of writing. Your words have influenced me as a writer in many subtle ways; and I think this poem is a good example of that. Thanks for the compliments man!

[Lubesh]

I missed this....free flowing like wax almost and heated with some personal elements ...Nicely written by the way lol

[RENA HANDS]

Ingenious, very original.

[nightcharmer]

Need you get that emo? Haha. Awesome piece. And nice title.

[SeaN]

Thanks Lu, Rena and NC!

[RENA HANDS]

Previously, I wrote, ‘ingenious, very original.’ This remains true. But now I can add a rating 4 of 5.