[Corneac]

I emerged from the womb today,
helpless, intuitive – dependant,
but on whom,

I took a breath
and the placenta shed,
my blankets shifted weight
from my back to my elbow,
and into the world,
I emerged,
all naked and staring,

and the cold air would hit me
like the cold doctors hand,
and I would scream,
and I would weep,
I would scream for the memory
and the comparison to all I knew,

and I stood on two feet,
my head pounding – still in sleep,
smoked a cigarette,
then ate solid food,
Yes, fresh from the womb,

[Venomous Vixen]

I emerged,
all naked and staring,

something about the "all" felt off... even without the word altogether it would keep its meaning and I think flow a bit better.

and the cold air would hit me
like the cold doctors hand,

Your tense seems to change here with the use of the word "would". Again, removing it entirely would not harm the piece and would keep the tense.

and I would scream,
and I would weep,
I would scream for the memory
and the comparison to all I knew,

Again, you use would, and only in this stanza does the tense change. Maybe...

I screamed
and I wept
for the memory
and the comparison
to all I knew

Beyond those minor things I loved this piece. It is very true to the title. The images were perfect, you could almost see the writer emerging and shedding everything. I also enjoy when you end the poem the same way you began, reinforcing the image of the womb, making a tidy little package. This new style fits you, beautiful piece.

[MindsEye]

Every day a rebirth.. an emergance from our warm world of comforts dreams.. into cold reality of hard floors and dingey air. Wonderful use of contrast to draw a connection between the two experiences in life. The use of hyphenation in the first and last stanza is a good way to tie the structure together as well as the end rhyme. OK now for my suggestions.. not that there is anything wrong of course...

The use of "and" at the begining of lines 5, 8, 11, 13, 14, 16, 18 can be eliminated and i believe it will help that issue of awkward flow. again just a suggestion to try. You will see it will change the feeling a bit and add a sence of abruptness to the line that may be more appealing to the pallete. Great vision.

[RENA HANDS]

How many (doctors) hit the babe?

Or did u intend…like the cold doctor’s hand,(?)

Cynical and poignant at the same time.

My favorite…smoked a cigarette,
then ate solid food,
Yes, fresh from the womb,

U don’t see or read two conflicting ideas/state associated so with the birth of life. A rating 5 of 5 so deserving of such a masterpiece.