EMWE #2 Creeping

[-Jim-]

*****Hope I got this right, too*****




Water rose silently in the night, rain shivering in the mute lightning. Shrill cries of panic split the night and the creeping water filled crevices. Several loud, sharp cracking sounds signaled a homes surrender to deepening pressure. They broke and bobbed in the black, swirling liquid, like a weird bubble on God’s fishing pole. A Cadillac cruises by as if on a slow, Sunday drive; then again, a Honda caught on the deeper freeway currents hidden below.

The banks of the nearby, usually happily chuckling, river exploded up and outward as a violent, churning wall blasted its way down the packed funnel of bedrock. Nestled safely in the crook of a large tree, cries of terror floated by me; a family desperately clinging to what must be left of their home. The questioning voices of horses, sheep, cattle, and various house pets surrounded me, seemingly disembodied as I could see no source for the noise and I questioned crazily: “What must the fishes be asking?”

A baby cries a short distance away and I hear the muffled “shhhh” of a loving mother, another cries further out and I hear the sharp stern yell of a father and wonder what on earth he could be yelling at the child for. Hours floated by on the softly whispering current and the faint, gray dawn bloomed. With it came the silent cessation of the downpour as if a faucet had been turned off. The water gave way to sodden destruction. Incredibly, water squirted from the broken pipes of ruined houses. Weeks passed under a steady march of work and the flood became a thing of the past, rarely thought of, seldom spoken of.

[Wordsmyth]

COme on now. You abviously didn't have much trouble with this yourself. Well done.

a family desperately clinging to what must left of their home.

Think you might have left out a word here somewhere.

[Lubesh]

Some very nice and interesting imagery deatal and some quirky drama and overall a great job!

[-Jim-]

Word: Thanks for noticing that. I went through it twice and didn't catch it. I got 'er fixed. Actually, this was pretty difficult for me. This sort of challenge actually makes you use your brain.

Thanks a bunch, Lubesh! I appreciate it.

[Venomous Vixen]

Some great images! This one in particular was my favorite...

They broke and bobbed in the black, swirling liquid, like a weird bubble on God’s fishing pole.

Ah everyone is making voting difficult again the comp, but good to see everyone seems to get the gist of it now! I loved this one.

[-Jim-]

Thanks, Bri! I'm glad you did, and I'm glad I got it right.

[dorian hanes]

(For me) this reads like a religious banter. Or at least what I call a ‘religious banter.’ And I LOVE, LOVE those that really move the heart and bring water to the eyes…

1. Should this be a possessive -…, sharp cracking sounds signaled a homes* surrender to deepening pressure. (?)