XMAS 2009 100W/C -Untitled

[RENA HANDS]

This holy season
Bombs, bullets are exploding
Such wonder is this.
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Dying, crying eyes
Soldiers, rolling tanks, draw near
Infidels seek sympathy.
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Frightened little boy,
Clasp, dispensed Holy Bible
Where is his Father?
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White Tiger Lilies
Desiccated black petals
Where is his Father?
**
Scarlet soldiers march
Hear Torricelli’s Trumpet
Infidels are falling.
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Bellowing fire spews
A siren of gossamer, sings
Clasping her bouquet.
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Alluring blank orbs
Raven curls sweep pale shoulders
Temptress in guise?
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White Tiger Lilies
Desiccated black petals
The Bible, crashes.
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White Tiger Lilies
Desiccated black petals
Tainted tribute, falls.

© Rena Hands December 2009 –This entry was most inspired by Silver Bells, songwriters: Jay Livingston and Raymond B. Evans, I believe.

[RENA HANDS]

Editors and or Administrators, I made an error and meant for my entry to be Centered, could You correct this 'format/paragraph(s) error?'

[RENA HANDS]

Thank You so very, very, very, very much.

[Syrah]

Interesting what going by just inspiration will lead to. A very interesting piece that I'm still digesting. (Sorry... bit late and am tired- but it lacked comments so I thought I'd drop a line )

[RENA HANDS]

No worries at all my Lady, Syrah. I’m just relieved and most happy that this entry actually qualifies as something not necessarily ‘going against the grain.’ I think I screwed myself with my TotM #14 -Father Christmas submission. I thought ‘Father Christmas’ was a fair game idea. It wasn’t until later that the realization, the connection had to be with Santa Clause (I smack my forehead-against the wall). Oh, well, ‘what’s done is done’ is something too that ‘they’ say (lol)…

Thank You very, very, very much for the read and compliment(s). And I hope to see/read ur entry too for the XMas Special?

[Lubesh]

As I have said..well done and a different tack and not so gentle haiku.

You have more than a 5 count in this line

'A bellowing fire spews' You have 6 syllables

[RENA HANDS]

Lubesh,

www.rhymezone. come states that ‘spew(s)’ is just one syllable. If I’m still in error, I’ll correct this.

A1 bellowing2 fire1 (4) spews1? 5?

OR is it –

A bellowing fire spew 5?

Crap! Damn this poetry, Damn.

[Syrah]

a (1) bel-low-ing (3) fire (1) spews (1)

[RENA HANDS]

MOTHER ******

and U know the rest.

Lady Syrah, TY for the English/Spelling/Syllable* lesson.

I shall make the correction -Immediately.