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Old 24-01-2009, 09:50 PM
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FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time


Catatonia lives haunt the pharm

The cattle waits in an anxious line

They smile pharmaceutically wide

Their eyes are open but drugged over


The clock in my head has started again

I ran out of feed at a quarter to ten

I curse these hands of mine

Please, pass me the pills for candy time.


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Old 24-01-2009, 09:54 PM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

This was different but I especially liked the picture. I went along the piece very well i think. Good job.

I really liked the thid line about the eyes fogged over and the one about killing me while i'm living.
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Old 25-01-2009, 12:23 AM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Hmmmm, that's very interesting. It certainly gets brownie points for being so creative.
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Old 27-01-2009, 03:50 AM
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Love the changes, Peppy. Making this a difficult vote for me.
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Old 27-01-2009, 11:21 AM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Just brilliant, perfectly captured 'hallucination'. Really I don't know what else I can offer up but I absolutely LOVED this entry!!
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Old 28-01-2009, 02:50 AM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Love! Definitely captured that dreamy, trippy feeling I would expect with a prompt like 'hallucination', but you still gave it your own twist. Great artwork, and great entry.
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Old 28-01-2009, 03:22 AM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Ha! That was pretty interesting, Peppy. The art work fits perfectly well with the words, did you draw it especially for this prompt? Or did you have it floating around? The poem was one of those that I'll need to come back to to gain a handle on. Or maybe the reader just isn't supposed get a handle on it, which would make perfect sense. Nice work.
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Old 28-01-2009, 03:39 AM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

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The art work fits perfectly well with the words, did you draw it especially for this prompt? Or did you have it floating around?
Elohel, I was waiting for someone to ask me about the picture. Yes, I made it just for this prompt. I felt like drawing something. I wanted to do it for the 55 for a long time, didn't really get inspired to draw though. Yeah.

But I guess I went over 55 words since a picture is worth a thousand. (Man my jokes are lame.)

Pharmacy + People

Anywho, thanks for reading people. Double thanks to Rain for reading it twice, elohel.

Also, thanks to the other people who have yet you read it, they maybe under this post-comment.


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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

I am not as ‘learned’ as are the other members of this site, so please explain ‘who or what is Catatonia?’

And what is ‘the pharm?’ Is it a shortening of the ‘paranormal?’

Maybe…Their* smile pharmaceutically wide (?)
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Old 02-02-2009, 12:10 PM
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Re: FFFC #51 - Catatonia Lives In a Haunting Time

Oooo, questions only I can answer. Sweetness.

pharm(acy) <----see what I did. Farm, pharm.

catatonia - a symptom, especially of schizophrenia, characterized by rigid muscles and stupor, often alternating between psychotic excitement.

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NICE!!!! I liked this one
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